Now that you have gotten feedback from a real audience, you can see what a difference there is between feedback and great feedback. When you comment on this post, please answer the following questions in complete sentences. Make sure to really share some great thinking.
1. How did you feel about the feedback you got?
2. Does this feedback help you see why it is so important to be specific?
3. Please describe the feedback you wish you received.
Here is an example answer so that you can see what kind of comments I expect:
Mr. Moore,
I did not feel good about the feedback I got because I did not really learn much. I do not think I can improve my story with the feedback I received. I can see that it is important to be specific. When people just write "nice job" it makes me feel like they really didn't have anything to say about my story. It's almost as if they didn't even listen to me when I read my piece. I know that some parents had a hard time since they didn't know what to write, and I know that some parents had a hard time writing in English, but I definitely have some ideas about the feedback I wish I received. I wish that people had written specific feedback that told me more about how to make my writing better, or told me more about what was great in my piece.
Your friend,
Johnny
Now, please go ahead and comment. Use my example as an example. Please do not just copy what I wrote. Use your own words and your own thoughts. Thanks!
~ Mr. Moore
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18 comments:
I felt proud of my self when I read my feed back. I also wanted to share the one about my uncle getting shot which was two weeks ago.
Chantel
Dear Mr.Moore
On number 1 I think that I did not get enough feedback.On number 2 I think that feedback doesn't help me be specific why it is so important to add more details to our stories.I wish that the feed back that I wish for it will come true.
From Julyssa
The feed back made me feel like I needed to do some inprovments. Yes because some people don't get what your trying to say. I got feed back so powerful everybody wanted to read it.
Manuel
I felt proud of my self when I read my feed back. I also wanted to share the one about my uncle getting shot which was two weeks ago. Feed back help me see why it is important to be specific because with the feed back you can improve and make your writing better.
Chantel
Mr. Moore,
I kind of got disappointed about my feedback because they didn't really help me to improve my writing. Except yours. I guess it's because you're the teacher. But, I was really excited to share my story. Even again and again. I want a feedback that tells me what I can improve and nice compliment that describes their feelings. Not like, "good." or "I liked it."
Sincerely,
Narah
Dear Mr. Moore,
I liked my feed back a lot.
I did learn something I learned
that I should be specific in my story and tell my reader what happend to my brother. Like in my in my story that I read to them. I got some stuff that I would get. I like the feedback you gave me because I get an idea when people read my story I wrote good things. And it made me learn a lot for writing. Thank You Mr. Moore.
sencerly
Anna Karen
Dear Mr. Moore,
I didn't like my feedback that much because it didn't help me get an idea to become a better writer. I wish I got feedback that told me what I can do better or what I could improve. The person that I was with said good story, good reading.
Julyssa
Dear Mr. Moore,
when I got my feed back one of the adults said I had a "exciting story and that I had good beginning I wish she gave me more feed back than that.
Dominique
Dear Mr. Moore
I didn't get much feed back So I don't
what to do with it
Sincerely
Michele
Dear Mr. Moore,
I got really good feedback because I actually learned something. I also got positive feedback. I also learned good stuff.
Arturo
To:Dominique
What kind of feed back did you want to get back? Is it about your lead?
Chantel
Dear Manuel I think that your story is awsome and it includes good details and explains what you are trying to write about.
From Your Friend, Cesar
Dear Mr. Moore
I did not like my feedback because all it said was "good" and the second one said "She reads good, explain good to. I really did not learn anything.
Diana
Dear Chantle,
I do want more feed back for my lead and also for the rest of my story.
Dominique
Dear Mr.Moore,
Can you give us another chance to get our recess back? I don't get it why we don't get our recess back.
Your Friend Dzenad
Dear Mr. Moore,
I don't feel good about the feed back that I got because I didn't really get it. The feed back that I got does make me see why it is important to be specific. When people just right fix your mistakes and give me no question it seems like they haven't really paid attention to my story.
The feed back I wish I had gotten is, they would be specific about what really liked about my story. Also I wish they would ask me a question so I would know how to make my story better.
Torsha
Dear Mr. Moore,
I think getting feed-back from someone besides you as our teacher, will make our writing a lot better then having just one person give you feed-back. I think this because if only one person gives you feed-back, you won't have many ideas for how to make our writing better.
Admira
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